Ourian Cain Ivaldi (Complete / Revisited)

(I currently don't have a full-body pic of him.)

Basic info
Name: Ourian Cain Ivaldi
Age: 19
Birthday: September 17th
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 5' 11"
Weight: 210 lbs
Face Claim: Original (The pic was made by a friend of mine for me. The character is from a book I am writing.)

Stats
STR:3
DEF:4
RES:2
SPT:3
Aura 180|120 HP

Personality
Group: Gadgeteer
Likes:

• Drawing
  
• Writing
  
• Taking walks
  

Dislikes:

• Bullying
  
• Obnoxious Behavior
  
• Being interrupted while working on something
  

Fears:

• Losing a friend/Loved one
  
• Spiders
  
• True Darkness
  

Overall Personality: Ourian is very gentle and kind, but tends to keep to himself. It is very rare that he is angered. If successfully angered, however, Ourian will display a much darker side of him that he tends to keep hidden. This Dark Side, if you will, is a result of a past that he has yet to come to terms with. While sketching or writing, Ourian tends to be oblivious to those around, focusing solely on what he is working on. If interrupted, he will lash out in agitation; verbally, of course. For those who can see past this silent loner facade, one will find a very close and loyal companion in him.

Abilities
Aura type: Recovery
Aura Color: Pearl White
Semblance: Light Manipulation - Ourian's Semblance gives him the ability to gather light into his body and use it as an alternative energy source. As the energy builds up, Ourian can use this stored energy for a number of different uses, such as improving his damage output, protecting himself or those around him, or even to push others away from him with a burst of energy.

Burst - Ourian's signature ability while using his Semblance. Ourian gathers light into his palm or weapon, and releases it in a line in front of him in the form of a bursting beam of light (a crescent wave of energy in the case of his sword). On rare occasions, this ability can damage nearby objects, depending on the intensity of Ourian's focus.

Surge - Ourian generates light around his weapon or hands to amplify his damage output. Ourian tends to use this first upon activating his Semblance since he can gather Light at a controlled rate around his body to use at his discretion, as well as prepare for Raigetsu.

Flash - An ability used to get distance between himself and multiple foes by releasing a shockwave of light from his aura. This is a last resort ability due to it using his aura as a source of light and taking an immense toll on not only his aura, but his body as well. Unfortunately, this can also affect allies...

Repulse - A Defensive ability that generates a light barrier around the target used to mitigate damage. Ourian can cast a barrier onto an ally within fifty feet of himself as well, however he would have to maintain that barrier and focus solely on the target, for if they leave the fifty foot radius, it becomes too taxing on his aura nd he will not be able to sustain it.

Phaeton's Will - Ourian's final attack that takes all of the stored light energy within him and releases it all at once into the air and having it all rain down onto his enemies with a hail of light arrows. Once this ability is used, Ourian will leave his Semblance state and cannot call upon it for quite some time, considering the immense amount of strain it puts on his aura.

Item 1: Seeker: Rating 1 Weapon - A steel Blaster Blade that acts as a memento of his father. It was originally designed to discharge Dust using a Phial Cartridge, however this feature was never added due to unfortunate circumstances. (A picture will be included eventually.)

Item 2: Liberator: Rating 1 Magic Armor - A black carbon fiber gauntlet that acts as a memento of his mother. It was originally designed to be an entire armor set, however this was as far as his mother got with it due to unfortunate circumstances. (A picture will be included eventually.)

History and Sample

History:

RP Sample:

Bump*

It's been about 2 weeks now, guys... come on... At least tell me if you don't approve or something...

Hello!

Sorry for the delay.

Now most of this is fine, just a few little things are to be corrected though.

Main issue is with the semblance. First of all, you describe it more like light energy attacks than actual light, which is fine, but I just wanted to make sure it's either or : light energy or actual light. Your attacks don't act like real lights, able to physicaly damage and even block. So I take it you can't actually do flashbangs and make a room brighter or stuff like that, just use light as a powersource for your light energy attacks. Tell me if I'm wrong there :P
One thing we can't accept is "Reach". Since you're using light as a medium, it's instant and unbreakable, so it's basicaly telekinesis and that would be a separate power.

Other thing : your story is a bit too short. It needs to be 300 words minimum.

After that I think it'll be fine unless I missed something :)

Edited and awaiting second look

Yup, that's fine for me.

Just remember that Semblance use, be it damage, effect and aura cost, have to follow the Aura and Semblance rules. Even if you say it uses all his stored up energy and all, it's still maximum 20 aura cost for 20 semblance damage. But it's fun to have restrictions on strong attacks :P Makes for more fun RPs.

So you are now