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LethalPianist

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Basic info
Name: Forte Piano
Age: 18
Birthday: 10/31
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 5'11''
Weight: 150 lbs
Face Claim:
https://avvesione.wordpress.com/2012/05/27/sakamichi-no-apollon-7/

Stats
STR:4
DEF:2
RES:1
SPT:5
Aura 150|50 HP

Personality
Major: Academic Major
Likes: Music, Vale, Piano, Tacos, and Cool Atlas Military Technology
Dislikes: Boredom, Sitting still, Losing, and Tofu
Fears: War, Disease, and Failure
Overall Personality: When you see Onyx, you tend to see a cheerful, humorous, and sociable young man who laughs and makes too many bad jokes. On the rare occasion that you catch the other side of Onyx, you realize he's depressed, apathetic, and just a tad bit crazy.

Yep, he's bipolar. As a result people who spend lots of time with Onyx end up being confused as to what his actual personality is like. In all honesty, Onyx doesn't know either. When he's in a good mood, he thinks his depression is just a result of exhaustion, and that he'll be back to a good mood in no time. When he's in his bad moods, however, he believes his good moods are just a front that he puts on in front of his "friends."

So is he a normal kid? Or is he a depressed sociopath? That's for you to decide.


Abilities
Aura type: Recovery
Aura Color: Piano Black
Semblance: Portal. Onyx can teleport to any given location that he can see. If Onyx is moving during the teleportation, he retains his momentum afterwards, even if the direction he is moving in has changed. (Ex. If he is falling from the sky, he can place a portal entry on the ground and an exit going sideways, so the momentum from falling is transferred to vertical movement.)

Item 1: Hard-Light-Generator: Grand Piano
Similar to Velvet's weapon, it utilizes Hard-Light technology to render a piano wherever Onyx wants to place it. Since his Hard-Light-Generator doesn't have to change form, it's much more durable and can be used more consistently. Onyx uses the soundwaves from the piano to attack, as well as lure to sleep more simple-minded Grimm.

Item 2: Oscillation Blade
When Onyx can't use Grand Piano because he needs to be mobile, he uses Oscillation Blade. The Oscillation Blade has a black handguard with 3 white keys. It's also missing a blade. When Onyx presses one of the keys, the air along the "blade" of the sword start Oscillating, also producing a high-pitched sound. Depending on how many keys Onyx is pressing down on, the length of the sword varies from dagger to shortsword to longsword.

History and Sample
History:
RP Sample:

2Onyx Forte (Needs Approval) Empty Re: Onyx Forte (Needs Approval) Sat Mar 11, 2017 1:34 am

Akui

Akui
Hey there Lethal Pianist. It's been a bit since you posted this, and I'm sorry for the long wait. I've been modded very recently, and I noticed your app seems nearly completed. We just have a few changes to make.

The first is that you don't have any skills listed. I think this change was made before you made your app originally, but now each app must pick a single skill they excel at and a single skill they don't do so well. This current list can be found here, but for future reference it is the topic titled 'Skill List' in the 'Rules and Information' section.

It also appears that your image code at the top didn't quite work out, so a quick fix to that would be nice.

Not to be THAT guy, but I did a quick count, and while your Personality meets the 100 Word quota, your History and RP Sample do not meet their quotas (falling at 266/300 and 145/150 respectfully). I know it's not by much, but if you could maybe fluff them up a little bit, or maybe even come up with a super cool addition, it would be appreciated.

I saved the meaty part for last. The two items you have chosen cannot be approved as they are written now. First off, sound is a tricky thing to work with here at Syne Academy. You may notice it under the 'Banned Semblances' section, so this would clearly apply to any sound-based weapons. However, I have experience with this issue and found a way to make it work out, approved by Leena herself. Since most people cannot see sound, and the effects of sound happen when they are heard instead of felt, it falls under auto-hit territory...and that's simply not allowed. However, if you made the sound waves visible (maybe appearing similar to how the piano looks, or maybe have the Oscillation Blade [sweet name btw] effectively have the appearance of a lightsaber), this would make it so that your opponent still has a chance to avoid your attack.

The second half of this issue is that you can only start with one weapon, meaning you would have to pick either the piano or the blade. Your second item can be either Dust, Physical Armor, or Magical Armor.

I hope you see this and make the required changes, as your character seems really cool, and I'd like to RP with you in the future! ^_^

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