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1Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Angel Welmin Xueyou Fri Jan 09, 2015 2:09 pm

Angel Of Earth

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Basic info
Name:

Angel Welmin Xueyou


Age: (18)
Birthday: (aug 24 1996)
Gender: (Male)
Race: (human)
Height:(6ft)
Weight:(178lb)
Face Claim:(https://s95.photobucket.com/user/oburd99/media/AnimeGuy13_zps27b1c977.jpg.html?sort=3&o=0 )

Stats
STR:2
AGT:4 +1
SPD:3 +1
SPT:3
Aura 150|150 HP

Personality
Group:(researchers)
Likes: (bombs, shotguns, shiny objects, dub-step, fire and mindless destruction also things that sparkle and finallyBOOKS!! )
Dislikes: (rules, grim under 10ft tall,groups(don't like getting involved))
Fears: (grim over 10ft tall, death, girls, and angry extremist faunists)
Overall Personality: (a generally strange character and a tad of a pyromaniac loves causing confusion tends to stay outside of groups loves dust of any kind prefers it over a physical weapon. has a good sense of humor but has a tendency to be sarcastic. A major geek and can recite pretty much all the lore for every well known item and book. Tends to be the strange guy in the back corner but also has a decent proficiency with a short sword and 80% insane but will help out a friend in any circumstance but will be ruthless if required)

Abilities
Aura type: (speed)
Aura Color:purple (purple)
Semblance: (buff-personal-speed)
Item 1: (a hand and a half sword(bout 4 feet and light) which he keeps hidden inside of his coat)
Item 2: (a cloak that has been infused with a combination of dusts that make it so the cloth absorbs light ,no armor affects,)

History and Sample
History:
RP Sample:



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2Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Tue Jan 13, 2015 12:56 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
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Hi! My name is Leena and I'll be your mod today!

Alrighty, Let's get this started. Sorry for the wait. >-<

Image: The image code should be in the template, please have the image link in that. If its not there ill give you the code-
Code:
[img]Link goes here[/img]
Basic Info: Height/weight/face claim are required, Please fill them out.
Stats: You get 12 points to work with, please add in 6 more
Group: This is required. This just tells me what color to make you upon approval and what kinds of bonuses you get in RP. It can also act as a guide to what kinds of ideals your chara has, whenever we get enough people for the plot that needs it.
Item 1: at start, we only allow weapons with one form, not including folding for portability. Your weapon can be a gun or a sword, but not both until level 3.
Item 2: You are allowed a choice of 5 posts worth of dust in a single element; Fire, Water, Wind, or Earth. Cannot have an assortment of such.
History/RP Sample (This could also be implemented into Overall Personality) This is a Third person RP, so I ask that all Histories and RP samples are third person, rather than first. More importantly, there are several Grammatical errors and a severe lack of punctuation that makes these sections difficult to read, please fix it.

Bump when done~ ^-^

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3Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Tue Jan 13, 2015 2:33 pm

Angel Of Earth

Angel Of Earth
face claim? i dont understand

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4Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Tue Jan 13, 2015 3:06 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
Basically the source of the image that shows your character's appearance. For example, Mine would be Leonmitchelli Galette des Rois from Dog Days. if You just have a google image or deviant art or something, just put that as the face claim.

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5Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Tue Jan 13, 2015 4:01 pm

Angel Of Earth

Angel Of Earth
ok and done

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6Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Tue Jan 13, 2015 4:08 pm

Angel Of Earth

Angel Of Earth
and the problem is not with my understanding of html it is the source or my computer when i do image tag the image for some reason did not load i put it in but i may not work or it might be my computer
P.S i have taken 3 courses on html it is NOT my html knowledge

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7Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Tue Jan 13, 2015 6:12 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
The image is broken, I'm not sure if the file is corrupt or what.

Semblance: Just a minor thing I forgot to mention, please specify that your teleportation can only move you up to 10 meters, and the landing spot must be in your line of sight.

Leena Lilac wrote:History/RP Sample (This could also be implemented into Overall Personality) This is a Third person RP, so I ask that all Histories and RP samples are third person, rather than first. More importantly, there are several Grammatical errors and a severe lack of punctuation that makes these sections difficult to read, please fix it.

^this still applies.

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8Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Tue Jan 13, 2015 8:17 pm

Angel Of Earth

Angel Of Earth
now im done i think

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9Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Fri Jan 16, 2015 12:27 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
Image is still broken. The problem is the link itself. It has to end in .jpg or .png or even .gif

Age: August 24 1995 would make your character 19. (I know because that's my birthday. :o )

Semblance: Just a nit pick, but can you explain the semblance a little bit? I'm pretty sure I know what you're going for, but just in case.

History needs to be in 3rd person, and both the History and RP sample still have a lack of Punctuation that needs to be fixed. A lot of us (me) make our mistakes (me) with grammar sometimes (me), But we try to be as grammatically correct as we can hear, mostly so that everything remains easy to read.

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10Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Fri Jan 16, 2015 12:53 pm

Angel Of Earth

Angel Of Earth
k

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11Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Sat Jan 17, 2015 7:13 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
Age: you are either 19 or the year you were born is 1996.

Semblance: I don't really understand this new semblance, is there a different way you can explain it?

History/RP Sample: These are MUCH better, but there are still some major grammar errors that do need to be fixed, mostly in the RP sample, where it is most important that these errors do not exist. There are many run on sentences that you need to get rid of.

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12Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Mon Jan 19, 2015 6:18 pm

Angel Of Earth

Angel Of Earth
finished i think sorry though because grammer has never been one of my strong suites

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13Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Thu Jan 22, 2015 8:22 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
Age: You are either 19 or the year you were born is 1996.

Race: If you are only mistaken for Faunus, the race is still Human.

Semblance: The way I'm reading this, you can just bend reality to your will, and I cannot allow that. Please change the semblance.

Angel wrote: After that interesting interaction with his time piece he went down stairs “hmm” he thought “I feel like I'm missing something” he looked at the couch “...why is my suitcase on the couch...” Then he remembered, “aw frick” and rushed back up the stairs, but not after grabbing his suitcase, because at that moment he remembered that this was the day he was going to Syne Academy.

He ran up grabbed it out of his resting place and rushed out and partly flew into the waiting cab. Once he was inside he realized he could have used a time slow glyph “dangit” he muttered.

These sections in the RP sample are missing too many commas and a period or two.

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14Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Fri Jan 23, 2015 1:12 am

Angel Of Earth

Angel Of Earth
sry bout the sembalence I never meant for it to be OP I was more thinking more along the lines of alchemy and the faunis thing was to set off extremists because i noticed there a lot of them and i would prefer to not be murdered as soon as i go in to a pvp post also as i said before i am so sorry about the punctuation it is just something i am very bad at(no sarcasm intended) but thx for taking the time to look over it

also-done

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15Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Sun Jan 25, 2015 12:38 am

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
I still have the same issue with your semblance, It is too powerful. Too OP. I am gonna suggest a simpler transmutation semblance, where you can transform things if you want, but it has to be of a certain material and it cannot change materials. Basically changing the shape of a specific type of item, if that makes more sense.

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16Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Sun Jan 25, 2015 5:15 pm

Angel Of Earth

Angel Of Earth
DONE!!!

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17Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Wed Jan 28, 2015 8:48 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
What kind of buff? Who do you buff?

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18Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Wed Jan 28, 2015 9:04 pm

Angel Of Earth

Angel Of Earth
got that

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19Angel Welmin Xueyou  Empty Re: Angel Welmin Xueyou Wed Jan 28, 2015 9:07 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
Fair enough. Approved!

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