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1Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Character-Thorn Godwin Sun Dec 28, 2014 6:20 pm

Thorn Godwin

Thorn Godwin
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Character-Thorn Godwin  Nx9ckOG

Basic info
Name: Thorn Godwin
Age: 16
Birthday: August 12
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 5"11
Weight: 130 lbs
Face Claim: Egil from SAO (remade)

Stats
STR:4
AGT:2
SPD:3
SPT:3
Aura 50|250 HP

Personality
Group: Warrior
Likes: Swords, Shields, Blueberry Pie
Dislikes: Spiders, Losing people he loves, small irregular holes 
Fears: Falling, Losing sight of whats right, Cannibals
Overall Personality: Thorn is never Courteous and takes risk carelessly. He is can be very ambitious will very curious. He can control his actions but sometimes gets carried away in what he is doing but is also very nurturing on occasions. You can rarely trust what he says but when he is saying the truth he is very blunt. He is loyal but does not find himself as a good leader. Thorn is optimistic and pays very close attentions to details when he can see them. In social epidemic he can be comforting but hard, loving and caring or he can be have no heart

Abilities
Aura type: Defense
Aura Color: Blue
Semblance: Thorn's semblance gives him a massive speed boost
Item 1: Duel-wield Short sword Character-Thorn Godwin  Cu6d747
Item 2: Tier 1 Fire Dust

History and Sample
History:
RP Sample:



Last edited by Thorn Godwin on Sat Jan 03, 2015 4:01 pm; edited 9 times in total

2Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Re: Character-Thorn Godwin Mon Dec 29, 2014 12:57 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
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Hi! I'm Leena And I'll be your Mod today!

Just a couple of things here.
Likes and Dislikes: You can't have a like be "killing grimm" and then a dislike be "Not killing grimm". That's kinda cheating, y'know. If you cant think of something, Just look around wherever you are irl and pick something stupid as a dislike. Something like "the color yellow", for example.

Fears: Same thing here. "falling into canyons" and "falling in general" is the same thing. Just have Falling as a fear and then find something else, no matter how irrational. (Fun fact: I'm kinda afraid of Grape Soda IRL. Find something dumb like that and it can even play into your roleplay later. ^^)

Semblance: First of all, due to new rules you don't have to specify any single sembalnce type if you don't want to. Just a heads up. Anyway, Your semblance seems to be something that you would probably already be able to do without aura (and with more damage done than with aura.) A semblance is a special power that your character has. For example, My RP chara can control metal. I suggest making your semblance a speed or jump boost to compliment the move you described. Or you could change it completely, up to you.

Item 2: Uh.... I'm confused. Isn't your character afraid of fire? It doesn't make sense to have fire dust....

Bump when done with any edits~ ^^

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3Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Re: Character-Thorn Godwin Mon Dec 29, 2014 7:36 pm

Thorn Godwin

Thorn Godwin
bump

4Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Re: Character-Thorn Godwin Thu Jan 01, 2015 6:45 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
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Leena wrote:Fears: Same thing here. "falling into canyons" and "falling in general" is the same thing. Just have Falling as a fear and then find something else, no matter how irrational.

Item 2: Uh.... I'm confused. Isn't your character afraid of fire? It doesn't make sense to have fire dust....
^ These two still apply

Semblance:
Don't limit yourself to a single move with your semblance. Simply say that you get a speed boost and that by itself is fine.

Bump when done!

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5Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Re: Character-Thorn Godwin Fri Jan 02, 2015 1:38 am

Thorn Godwin

Thorn Godwin
bump :)

6Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Re: Character-Thorn Godwin Sat Jan 03, 2015 1:33 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
Almost done! Just 2 minor nit picky things.

Dislikes: I am fully aware that "-phobia" can mean "a fear or strong dislike" of something. however, to avoid confusion, please refrain from using the suffix in the dislike section, as it is most commonly used for fear. For example, simply use 'spiders' instead of 'arachnophobia' Fear is not the same thing as dislike.

Semblance: just take out the part about your semblance being damage type and you should be good to go.

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7Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Re: Character-Thorn Godwin Sat Jan 03, 2015 3:18 pm

Thorn Godwin

Thorn Godwin
Awesome all done

8Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Re: Character-Thorn Godwin Sat Jan 03, 2015 3:30 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
Leena wrote:Fear is not the same thing as dislike.
Don't put Fears in the dislike area.

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9Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Re: Character-Thorn Godwin Sat Jan 03, 2015 4:02 pm

Thorn Godwin

Thorn Godwin
ok hopefully im done i just forgot to change that

10Character-Thorn Godwin  Empty Re: Character-Thorn Godwin Sat Jan 03, 2015 5:56 pm

Leena Lilac

Leena Lilac
Admin
There ya go! Approved~

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