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1Noir Lavender Topaz Empty Noir Lavender Topaz Sun Oct 15, 2017 1:52 am

Topaz James

Topaz James
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Basic info
Name: Noir Lavender Springfield
Age: 17
Birthday: 11/23
Gender: Male
Race: Faunus/wolf/Pricked ears
Height: 5'10
Weight: 150 pounds
Face Claim: Noir from tegami bachi

Stats
STR:4
DEF: 2
RES: 2
SPT: 4
Aura 200|100 HP

Personality
Major: Combat
Likes: Fighting, laughing, and games
Dislikes: Campers, rude people, and dominate women
Fears: spiders, abandonment, spirits
Talent:  Trapper/Trap Maker
Weakness Demolition Expert
Overall Personality: Despite Noir resting bitch face, he is a cheerful, optimistic, and flirty guy. He despises loneliness and constantly have feelings of abandonment which draws him to seek companionship from less than "reputable" people. Noir outlook on life is a weird one, he believes that the strong can lead due only to the fact that weak will follow those who are strong. Noir feels that school is a waste of time due to the fact that he live and travel with a huntsmen every since he was little. Although Noir came to understand why his father sent him here with his last words, Noir always quote the following, "The enemies are out there and they're not going to wait until I'm ready."    

Abilities
Aura type: Power
Aura Color: Lavender
Semblance: Hunting Grounds, Utility, Noir produces a thick fog of war which only he can see through, while Noir is in the fog his footsteps and breathing is muffled (you can still hear him slightly). When Noir is fog wrap (or in the fog) you aren't able to track his presence.
Item 1: Climbing Shoes, armor, equipment which allow user to climb, vault, and scale buildings with relative ease while protect. It's also slip resistant.
Item 2: Cross Tail, Is a thread device that hold 1 yard worth of string that is as strong as steel, the string can also be manipulate with the metal claws on the tips of the fingers. The string can be used to create traps, attach to weapons and people, and utility like things.
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History and Sample
History:
RP Sample:



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2Noir Lavender Topaz Empty Re: Noir Lavender Topaz Sun Oct 15, 2017 8:10 am

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Hey welcome to the site, this app is good but there are a couple things that need fixed up ^^First and easiest is that you have specified faunus, with no clear indication of your trait. You do need to specify that next to your race ^^ You have one more stat point yet to distribute. Next, and I think most difficult, is word counts? You have not reached the required wordcounts for personality, history or rp sample ^^ Next, just a couple things on semblance, while not a problem to make sure you know the maximum range of your smog would be a ten meter radius; and I am a little confused by some of the wording of your semblance. Specifically "while his presence is erasure." There are a couple cases like these, you may want to do a couple scans of your app just to make things 100% clear. And just to be clear, while you could have it muffle the sound sound would not be 100% removed by the semblance ^^

Finally, in regard to your weapon "Cross Tail" while you could do weapon damage to the string slashing with the claws themselves would only do your base strength damage.

Bump when done

3Noir Lavender Topaz Empty Re: Noir Lavender Topaz Sun Oct 15, 2017 2:46 pm

Topaz James

Topaz James
A simple bump

4Noir Lavender Topaz Empty Re: Noir Lavender Topaz Sun Oct 15, 2017 3:04 pm

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
You have specified a type of faunus but not a trait which is what's required ^^ You have also not met the required word count on your rp sample. Also, looking at your history and from an in universe perspective, I have an addendum that I strongly recommend; that being you state the village was on an island off the coast of Menagerie rather than on Menagerie itself. This is based on the size of Menagerie and how cramped it has been mentioned to be in the show. Bump when done

5Noir Lavender Topaz Empty Re: Noir Lavender Topaz Sun Oct 15, 2017 4:22 pm

Topaz James

Topaz James
Bump you with it two time

6Noir Lavender Topaz Empty Re: Noir Lavender Topaz Mon Oct 16, 2017 10:42 am

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
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