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1Amarante Sakura Empty Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 1:10 am

Amarante

Amarante
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Basic info
Name: Amarante Sakura
Age: 17
Birthday: 5/15
Gender: female
Race: Faunus
Height: 4'6
Weight: 100lbs
Face Claim: Google
http://orig08.deviantart.net/6a9b/f/2012/058/d/e/nine_tail_fox_girl_anime_by_piepienyo-d4r5whg.png

Amarante Sakura Nine_tail_fox_girl_anime_by_piepienyo-d4r5whg

Stats
STR:1
DEF:1
RES:5
SPT:5
Aura 250|50 HP

Personality
Major: dust (formerly academic)
Likes: sweet foods, beautiful things, quiet
Dislikes: loud noise, people touching her, fighting
Fears: people, being unable to protect herself,  being judged
Overall Personality: A quiet, timid child. Amarante is an unlikely huntress who is quick to hide rather than fight. She is innocent to the point of being naive about most things and is easily led astray by people older than her. She is a very trusting and loving person even though she is afraid of people in general and men in particular. Those who truly prove her trust in them have a loyal friend. she recently developed an independence streak after almost dying at the claws of a grimm, which has led to family problems. She is constantly down on herself when things go wrong and feels like she has to prove herself from time to time and do incredibly stupid things to make a point.

Abilities
Aura type: recovery
Aura Color: pink
Semblance: Healing Glyph and Shielding Glyph, nine tails of pink flame appear when using her semblance. The healing glyph can either create an aura around her that restores allies within a 10 meters of her or she can channel it around her allies in the form of soothing pink ethereal flames. Her shielding glyph creates a wall of pink ethereal flames around around her and her allies and can either reduce or block altogether incoming attacks. She can simultaneously cast both glyphs, but to do so, she must stay immobile and focus and thus she's highly vulnerable in close combat. She is capable of using other glyphs, but is most comfortable with these two.
Dust Glyph : effect very based on the dust loaded into her fans. Often used to create barriers but can also use direct attack.
Step Glyph: simply a platform used to increase mobility. Can also be used to impede an enemy's movement
Item 1: A pair of gunsen fans named Hope and Mercy
Item 2: 2 vial of fire dust

History:
RP Sample:



Last edited by Amarante on Thu Aug 25, 2016 11:05 am; edited 9 times in total

2Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 12:27 pm

Amarante

Amarante
Ready for grading

3Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 1:07 pm

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Alright ^^ welcome to the site. There are a couple small problems with your app but nothing too big. The first is that the minimum age for entry is 17, thus characters must be that age with the exception of androids (as age has less effect on them)

The second thing is your semblance, while it works from my perception could I get some more detail? How does it shield her, does a dome of sorts come around from the glyph's edges? Does it heal people on contact with the glyph?

Third is quite simple, your weapon does count as one of your two items and your item one wouldn't be allowed so you could just put your fans in that one slot ^^

That and your personality is under 100 words, at 72

Please fix these minor things and bump when done ^^

4Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 1:40 pm

Amarante

Amarante
rebumpa! ^_^

5Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 1:51 pm

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Alright ^^ The semblance, you can't have that rate of healing for aura consumption. Only the standard 30 aura for 20 hp when healing one person and 30 aura for 10 hp when healing mutiple at once. Also in regards to range the maximum range of a semblance is ten meters, 32.8-ish feet. That and if you want to have any other glyphs, even if you do not know them IC, you have to state them here and explain them. Bump when done

6Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 2:24 pm

Amarante

Amarante
Babumpa! ^_^

7Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 2:40 pm

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Alright ^^ so the elemental glyphs can't be a thing as that would come under multi element, the glyphs which raise and lower stats must specify which stat and they raise/lower a stat by two for ten aura not by one. You can't have it be random as it is in the case of the lower one. That and don't state the time stat points are increased or lowered by, it's one post. That and I could use some explanation on how each is done. Bump when done.

8Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 3:37 pm

Amarante

Amarante
Bumpybump^_^

9Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 4:32 pm

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Okay, if it is actually fire you won't be able to do the defense, however by eliminating it being actual flames and through using the dust glyph and fire dust you could achieve basically all you have set out here even if it would eat up consumables. Regardless you can't have the semblance be actual fire as well as defensive and manipulatable by your dust. Bump when done ^^Getting really close

10Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Wed Aug 24, 2016 11:35 pm

Amarante

Amarante
So I changed bit so the semblance looks like fire but isn't. Dies that work?

11Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Thu Aug 25, 2016 4:00 am

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
it does ^^ But with that you still need to get rid of the fire glyph

12Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Thu Aug 25, 2016 9:11 am

Amarante

Amarante
Fixed

13Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Thu Aug 25, 2016 9:26 am

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Alright, last thing I think ^^ You only start with 2 vials of one dust type though you can buy any of the tier one dusts from the shop as soon as you have the lien, bump when done. Almost there ^^

14Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Thu Aug 25, 2016 10:55 am

Amarante

Amarante
yay! finished!!! Gasp Gasp

15Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Thu Aug 25, 2016 11:02 am

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Almost XD it looks like you broke your history spoiler when you fixed the dust ^^ just put [ in front of where it says spoiler="History"] so it reads [spoiler="History"] Bump when done ^^

16Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Thu Aug 25, 2016 11:05 am

Amarante

Amarante
ahno! Fear fixed ^_^

17Amarante Sakura Empty Re: Amarante Sakura Thu Aug 25, 2016 11:08 am

Richard Lionheart

Richard Lionheart
Approved

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